高考英语读后续写备考：分析特色，沿袭语言风格

高考英语备考：分析特色袭语言风格

读续写实质根提供原文容写出旨致逻辑畅语言风格致事结尾续写时考虑事题思想特关注逻辑外高度关注续写部分原文语言风格确保写出结尾语言风格原文保持致
然时续写练中发现学忽略点具体表现：
1 词太复杂偏僻学增加谓高级词汇刻意超纲词汇情况学致解词汇汉语解释岂知汉语解释难英语单词语义完全致果英语单词定语境较深刻理解果汉语词义肤浅解作高级词汇会出现语义语法问题老师建议写作中量课中学单词果超纲词记住原：
（1）注意课外词汇
（2）课外词汇必须语境非常清楚单词单词词义知半解高级词汇
（3）超纲词定语境明确情况
2 高级句式太集中学追求续写高级刻意追求谓高级句式简单句子表达清楚刻意复杂句式句子结构累赘反影响句意表达老师建议：
（1）太刻意追求高级句式较合适语境中
（2）高级句式太集中注意位置注意文章段落结构衡协调文章句子长短结合复合句简单句交
3 注意原文句子词风格心欲样续写原文语言风格偏离没原文协调致
名师导学
写出原文语言风格致文章呢？
1 精读原文理解文章表达旨思想
文字思想服务表达特定思想需相应情感特色文字果作者褒扬特定事会积极文字果贬低件事会消极文字理解文章旨续写中合适语言指导意义
2 细品原文分析原文词风格
想续写文字准确握原文文字非常准确理解想准确理解原文文字特点文章旨指导原文文字进行仔细分析原文文字特点分析包括：
（1）原文物动作心理描写分析
（2）原文话话语特点分析
（3）原文场景描写分析
3 机组织语言保持原文风格致
通原文旨理解语言准确分析会原文语言特点较准确握然原文特点致文字进行续写
案例导引
Five years ago I had a job at the other end of the city and I usually commuted（班返） to work by bus Those long tiring hours of travelling were always annoying But one day it was healing
It was an evening and I got on the bus that would take me home I chose a seat by the window which could prevent me from being bothered by others It was nearly 6：00 pm but the bus was not yet full and the driver gave no indication that he intended to get the bus on the road soon
Minutes later a middleaged woman took a seat beside me It seemed that she was crying all the way Seeing her heartbreaking situation I asked her whether I could help her She thanked me and shook her head Then she tearfully narrated her story
She had come to the city to visit her daughter On the way a thief had snatched one of her bags which had contained half of the money shed brought with her The other half was rolled in a handkerchief and hidden under her blouse so she fortunately still had some money left
The bus conductor the driver and other passengers listened to her story but no one said anything After a while she stopped crying removed some cheese bread from her bag and began to eat worry still knitting her brow
An old man in ragged clothes got on the bus He sat in the seat just in front of the woman
When all the seats were taken the driver got behind the wheel and started the engine The bus conductor began to collect tickets and asked us where we were getting off When he came to the old man the poor man lowered his head nervously Seeing this the conductor asked the man to show his ticket in a loud voice The old man admitted in a low voice that he did not buy a ticket He explained that he had spent all his money this morning when he’d accidentally got on the wrong bus and now he was trying to go home
注意：
1 续写短文词数应150左右
2 续写部分分两段段开头语已写
Paragraph 1：
Hearing this the bus conductor ordered the old man to get off the bus
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Paragraph 2：
The woman seated behind the old man was also observing the incident
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题语境：社会
语篇类型：记叙文
原文意：作者公交车非常伤心中年妇女车原女路半钱偷位老前身钱买车票发现坐错车导致现已没钱买票
题思想：赞美丢钱中年妇女善良批判司机售票员情冷酷教育善良应帮助
[角色 词风格 动作 心理 the author long tiring
annoying
healing — 烦恼慰藉 the
woman heartbreaking worry still knitting her brow crying thanked me
tearfully narrated 幸
伤心 the driver
and the
Conductor — gave no indication
said nothing in a loud voice 冷漠
没
情心 the old man — in a low voice lowered his head nervously 担心
害怕 ]
原文物词出角色作者词样风格
文章开始作者tiringannoying件事healing续写事中应该体现出作者healing情节
描述中年妇女时候表达幸词汇根文章旨位中年妇女幸善良续写第二段应该描述善良面词风格方
老幸续写中老描述表示幸值情词汇
根文章旨司机售票员冷漠没情心代表续写时候词风格应该特点保持致
One possible version：
Hearing this the bus conductor ordered the old man to get off the bus The old man was almost in tears as he begged the bus conductor to let him take that bus so he could get home The bus driver who had been listening to his explanation stood up approached the old man and repeated the conductors command to urge the old man to get off the bus Apart from the harsh words from the driver and sobs from the old man the whole bus was in a terrible silence
The woman seated behind the old man was also observing the incident When the bus driver and conductor raised their voices at the old man she stood up and said Don’t be so rude to him Can’t you see he’s only trying to get home？ He doesn’t have any money the driver shouted The woman reached inside her blouse took out her remaining money and handed it to the conductor Here is his fare Please be kind to an old man Later she also shared her bread with the old man How much sweeter the journey was with the woman’s kindness and gracious behavior
续写文章语言特点分析：
the woman：
Don’t be so rude to him Can’t you see he’s only trying to get home？
Here is his fare Please be kind to an old man
Later she also shared her bread with the old man
话语描述充分表达作者位女士赞扬原文保持高度致
the bus driver and the conductor：
Urge the old man to get off the bus
Raised their voices
形象表现司机售票员冷漠情毫情心特征
the old man：
The old man was almost in tears as he begged the bus conductor to let him take that bus so he could get home
Sobs from the old man
续写中tearsbeggedsobs等单词描述老表现老幸怜原文语言色彩保持致
the author：
How much sweeter the journey was with the woman’s kindness and gracious behavior
描述作者心情单词关键句原文开头形成应

模拟导练
阅读面短文根情节进行续写构成完整事
Up until last week I would say that it was wise for you to stay away from an unfriendly person But now I take back that
I was going to a sports and nature camp and almost everything about it was fantastic： the activities the food the teachers and almost all of the kids The reason why I say almost is because there was a girl Elizabeth who was always frustrated and seemed determined to ruin the fantastic time
When I saw her sitting alone in the burning sun at lunch one day I said Want to join us under that nice shady tree over there？
Elizabeth said No really not
When we needed another person for our volleyball team and a boy called Jasper invited Elizabeth to play with us Elizabeth said If I wanted to play volleyball Id already be playing volleyball
After a few more unfriendly comments like that I decided to keep away from Elizabeth I mean if she wanted to have a terrible time that was one thing But there were only a few more days of camp left and I wanted to make the best of them
Well you know how just when you decide to do things one way life decides to do things the opposite way It so happened that we were going on a nature hike and our teacher paired everyone up with a partner Guess who my partner turned out to be
I can’t believe how warm it is I said trying to make small talk as we started out Do you like hot days like this？
I honestly don’t care about things like the weather Elizabeth whispered
I smiled nervously trying to think of a new topic What do you like to do for fun？
I like to walk in peace and quiet Elizabeth replied
OK I said
Later we had the quietest and most peaceful hike in the history of the universe until we met a bird It seemed that the bird was injured and tried to flee into the grass but in vain
注意：
1 续写短文词数应150左右
2 续写部分分两段段开头语已写
Paragraph 1：
Elizabeth knelt down before the bird
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Seeing the scene Elizabeth sighed in relief
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参考范文
Elizabeth knelt down before the bird Poor little creature Elizabeth murmured her voice sounding gentler than I’d ever heard He must have had his wing or foot injured just as my grandpa Your grandpa？ What happened to him？ I asked concernedly He slipped and broke his feet on the day when the camp started He’s still in hospital and suffering great pains No wonder you are so frustrated I thought to myself observing the birds another attempt The bird spread his wings and finally took off
Seeing the scene Elizabeth sighed in relief He made it And I believe your grandpa will be back on his feet soon too I said with a firm tone She nodded smiling at me for the first time From then on Elizabeth began to join me in my various topics And most of the time she actually enjoyed most of our activities of the camp as my partner Only then did I realize that it might be worth giving someone a second chance She may be going through a terrible time and just doesn’t know how to deal with it
评价导思
1 Elizabeth刚开始情绪特点什？
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2 原文特征性词句子表达Elizabeth情绪？
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3 续写语言原文中Elizabeth描述：
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