题目回顾
In at least 80 words write a letter to your headmaster suggesting rules you think should be changed or improved Support your opinions with facts or examples （校长写封少80词信建议条需改变改进学校规辅事实例子）
Remember Headmasters care about students’ learning safety and behavior They are also concerned about costs
l 文体：__应______文类型__信函______
思考
1 题目中关键词：___rules______
2 需写条建议改变改进学校规佳？2条
3 句话Remember Headmasters care about students’ learning safety and behavior They are also concerned about costs言意什？
1 提出建议必须reasonable 2站写信象角度问题意识
二文章框架
★ 动笔写作前请搭建文章框架
l 考场作文中应文结构记叙文议文说明文等结构相似通常采_总起________分述_______总结_____结构
请次阅读该作文题尝试搭建文章框架：
Dear headmaster
总起：作者写信象间建立联系（介绍身份表达目）
介绍身份：__I’m a student from Junior 3_____________
表达目：__In order to make our school better …______________________________
（连接词）__My first suggestion is___ （建议1）_to push back the school time___
(事实例子)_Many of us especially GradeNine students are sleepdeprived If …
分述：
（连接词）_Besides__ （建议2）_I suggest setting up a rule that requires …____
(事实例子)_In this way more students will get into the habit of …_____________
思考 1文称(I we studentsthey皆) 2文时态(般现般般等皆) 3两条建议详略分配(中条建议必须辅事实例子展开详略分明)
总结：表达写信象回信期写信象听取作者建议希
Sincerely yours
***
考场佳作定清晰文章脉络请解析篇范文脉络吧
（家学生文脉络梳理写面👆框架中）
Dear headmaster
I’m a student from Junior 3 Thank you for providing us with such a supportive learning atmosphere However in order to make our school better I have two suggestions on our school rules My first suggestion is to push back the school time Many of us especially GradeNine students are sleepdeprived If we are allowed to come to school half an hour later we will be more energetic and concentrated in class Besides I suggest setting up a rule that requires the school library and gym to extend their opening hours In this way more students will get into the habit of reading and exercising I’m looking forward to your reply
Sincerely yours
***
作者：PreDP2 秦仲禾
思考Thank you for providing us with such a supportive learning atmosphere句话作
连接介绍身份表达写信目起渡作表达写信目突兀时体现作者写作象身份意识
三文章容
读题目 In at least 80 words write a letter to your headmaster suggesting r_ules__ you think should be changed or improved Support your opinions with facts or examples （校长写封少80词信建议条需改变改进学校规辅事实例子）
*a RULE isa statement of what may must or mustn’t be done in a particular situation
请判断容否针学校规提出改变改进建议请√表示
1 The floor should be cleaned when it’s rainy
2 Students should be allowed to use the lift
√
3 The opening hours of our school library should be extended
√
4 There should be enough books in the school library
5 There should be a broader curriculum in our school
6 Our school should punish the students who say rude remarks in class
√
7 Doing gymnastics without a teacher’s supervision should be forbidden
√
8 My first suggestion is to push back the school time
√
9 After school students can be allowed to stay longer than before
√
10 We should be allowed to wear our own clothes one day of the week
√
11 We should be given the green light to take our own lunch to school
√
12 The recess between classes should be prolonged
13 Our school should provide tastier lunch for us
14 Students should be allowed to bring voice recorders to school
√
15 Students should be allowed to keep their borrowed books for longer than 45 days
√
★部分文重Body部分容务必切题否容分会损失惨重：
1 There should be enough books in the school library Once I wanted to finish my science project but I wasn’t able to get enough related reference books in the library
2Our school should provide tastier lunch for us In fact sometimes my classmates even throw it away after just tasting a bite
基学校规提出改变改进建议仅容切题更容易封信误写成投诉信(a letter of complaint)说校长乐意接受？请正确操作：
请阅读文字身边写学提建议辅事实例子时关注称时态
请划出建议部分
辅事实例子？
称时态
1 My first suggestion is to push back the school time Many of us especially GradeNine students are sleepdeprived If we are allowed to come to school half an hour later we will be more energetic and concentrated in class
事实
GradeNine students we
般现时
般时
2 Students shouldn’t bring any food to class From my observation many students have homemade food instead of school lunch resulting in a great deal of food waste Some even eat snacks during classes This creates a wide distraction for other students and therefore it has a negative effect on the learning atmosphere our school strives to build
事实例子皆
Students
般现时
3 Students should be allowed to keep their borrowed books for longer than 45 days I’ve seen too many students struggling to finish reading their borrowed books to avoid paying the overdue fine
例子
Students I
现完成时
波正确操作学会？请选择第二页方表格中符合容求项建议展开辅事实例子
建议（1 sentence）
事实例子（34 sentences）
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
四语气表达
l 总起部分
1 As a student in WFLA I am grateful to you for your effort to improve our school and it’s my honor to give some suggestions on the school rules
2 I’m a student from Junior 3 Thank you for providing us with such a supportive learning atmosphere However in order to make our school better I have two suggestions on our school rules
l 总结部分
1 These are my suggestions for our school rules and I really hope you can think about them
2 I sincerely hope you can take my suggestions on school rules into account
3 It would be nice if you could take my suggestions into consideration I am looking forward to your reply
★ *Remember Headmasters care about students’ learning safety and behavior They are also concerned about costs
写信时请站写信象角度思考问题意识
家找茬篇集问题身作文找出问题？
Draft
Problems
Dear headmaster
总起：I wrote this letter to express some of my ideas for our school
1 Who are you
2 Rules or ideas
分述：In my opinion students get too little time to take a break Some students barely have time to go to the toilet The recess time should be at least 15 minutes long
Also there should be more lights in the classroom Students can’t behave well if they can hardly make out the words on the blackboard
3 Which comes first your suggestion (about rules need improving) or further explanation examples
4 Is this a school rule
总结：There are lots of problems I haven’t mentioned But I sincerely hoped that we can have a better school life after fixing those problems
Yours sincerely
***
5 Are complaints necessary here
6 Is the past tense proper here
7 The writer has forgotten all about the purpose and the main focus of this letter
8 No closing statement
五修改（重写）作文
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题目回顾
In at least 80 words write a letter to your headmaster suggesting rules you think should be changed or improved Support your opinions with facts or examples （校长写封少80词信建议条需改变改进学校规辅事实例子）
Remember Headmasters care about students’ learning safety and behavior They are also concerned about costs
l 文体：__应______文类型__信函______
思考
1 题目中关键词：___rules______
2 需写条建议改变改进学校规佳？2条
3 句话Remember Headmasters care about students’ learning safety and behavior They are also concerned about costs言意什？
1 提出建议必须reasonable 2站写信象角度问题意识
二文章框架
★ 动笔写作前请搭建文章框架
l 考场作文中应文结构记叙文议文说明文等结构相似通常采_总起________分述_______总结_____结构
请次阅读该作文题尝试搭建文章框架：
Dear headmaster
总起：作者写信象间建立联系（介绍身份表达目）
介绍身份：__I’m a student from Junior 3_____________
表达目：__In order to make our school better …______________________________
（连接词）__My first suggestion is___ （建议1）_to push back the school time___
(事实例子)_Many of us especially GradeNine students are sleepdeprived If …
分述：
（连接词）_Besides__ （建议2）_I suggest setting up a rule that requires …____
(事实例子)_In this way more students will get into the habit of …_____________
思考 1文称(I we studentsthey皆) 2文时态(般现般般等皆) 3两条建议详略分配(中条建议必须辅事实例子展开详略分明)
总结：表达写信象回信期写信象听取作者建议希
Sincerely yours
***
考场佳作定清晰文章脉络请解析篇范文脉络吧
（家学生文脉络梳理写面👆框架中）
Dear headmaster
I’m a student from Junior 3 Thank you for providing us with such a supportive learning atmosphere However in order to make our school better I have two suggestions on our school rules My first suggestion is to push back the school time Many of us especially GradeNine students are sleepdeprived If we are allowed to come to school half an hour later we will be more energetic and concentrated in class Besides I suggest setting up a rule that requires the school library and gym to extend their opening hours In this way more students will get into the habit of reading and exercising I’m looking forward to your reply
Sincerely yours
***
作者：PreDP2 秦仲禾
思考Thank you for providing us with such a supportive learning atmosphere句话作
连接介绍身份表达写信目起渡作表达写信目突兀时体现作者写作象身份意识
三文章容
读题目 In at least 80 words write a letter to your headmaster suggesting r_ules__ you think should be changed or improved Support your opinions with facts or examples （校长写封少80词信建议条需改变改进学校规辅事实例子）
*a RULE isa statement of what may must or mustn’t be done in a particular situation
请判断容否针学校规提出改变改进建议请√表示
1 The floor should be cleaned when it’s rainy
2 Students should be allowed to use the lift
√
3 The opening hours of our school library should be extended
√
4 There should be enough books in the school library
5 There should be a broader curriculum in our school
6 Our school should punish the students who say rude remarks in class
√
7 Doing gymnastics without a teacher’s supervision should be forbidden
√
8 My first suggestion is to push back the school time
√
9 After school students can be allowed to stay longer than before
√
10 We should be allowed to wear our own clothes one day of the week
√
11 We should be given the green light to take our own lunch to school
√
12 The recess between classes should be prolonged
13 Our school should provide tastier lunch for us
14 Students should be allowed to bring voice recorders to school
√
15 Students should be allowed to keep their borrowed books for longer than 45 days
√
★部分文重Body部分容务必切题否容分会损失惨重：
1 There should be enough books in the school library Once I wanted to finish my science project but I wasn’t able to get enough related reference books in the library
2Our school should provide tastier lunch for us In fact sometimes my classmates even throw it away after just tasting a bite
基学校规提出改变改进建议仅容切题更容易封信误写成投诉信(a letter of complaint)说校长乐意接受？请正确操作：
请阅读文字身边写学提建议辅事实例子时关注称时态
请划出建议部分
辅事实例子？
称时态
1 My first suggestion is to push back the school time Many of us especially GradeNine students are sleepdeprived If we are allowed to come to school half an hour later we will be more energetic and concentrated in class
事实
GradeNine students we
般现时
般时
2 Students shouldn’t bring any food to class From my observation many students have homemade food instead of school lunch resulting in a great deal of food waste Some even eat snacks during classes This creates a wide distraction for other students and therefore it has a negative effect on the learning atmosphere our school strives to build
事实例子皆
Students
般现时
3 Students should be allowed to keep their borrowed books for longer than 45 days I’ve seen too many students struggling to finish reading their borrowed books to avoid paying the overdue fine
例子
Students I
现完成时
波正确操作学会？请选择第二页方表格中符合容求项建议展开辅事实例子
建议（1 sentence）
事实例子（34 sentences）
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
_____________________________________________
四语气表达
l 总起部分
1 As a student in WFLA I am grateful to you for your effort to improve our school and it’s my honor to give some suggestions on the school rules
2 I’m a student from Junior 3 Thank you for providing us with such a supportive learning atmosphere However in order to make our school better I have two suggestions on our school rules
l 总结部分
1 These are my suggestions for our school rules and I really hope you can think about them
2 I sincerely hope you can take my suggestions on school rules into account
3 It would be nice if you could take my suggestions into consideration I am looking forward to your reply
★ *Remember Headmasters care about students’ learning safety and behavior They are also concerned about costs
写信时请站写信象角度思考问题意识
家找茬篇集问题身作文找出问题？
Draft
Problems
Dear headmaster
总起：I wrote this letter to express some of my ideas for our school
1 Who are you
2 Rules or ideas
分述：In my opinion students get too little time to take a break Some students barely have time to go to the toilet The recess time should be at least 15 minutes long
Also there should be more lights in the classroom Students can’t behave well if they can hardly make out the words on the blackboard
3 Which comes first your suggestion (about rules need improving) or further explanation examples
4 Is this a school rule
总结：There are lots of problems I haven’t mentioned But I sincerely hoped that we can have a better school life after fixing those problems
Yours sincerely
***
5 Are complaints necessary here
6 Is the past tense proper here
7 The writer has forgotten all about the purpose and the main focus of this letter
8 No closing statement
五修改（重写）作文
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