期题目
初中三年学生活中定遇老师现请选择中帮助位老师()写封感谢信谈谈()印象回忆()帮助表达()祝福信开头落款已出计词数
提示词:kind help encourage thanks hope
写作指导
题求帮助老师写封感谢信亲身历写老师学定千言万语()说情真意切时格外注意文章详略条理
通审题获知:
1 文章题:感谢师恩
2 文章点:老师感谢情老师印象回忆老师帮助表达祝福
3 文章体裁:书信
4 文章称:you i
5 文章时态:回忆般时
学先相关短语词汇整理:
1 描写老师形容词呢
kind nice selfless patient easygoing responsible be strict with…
2 单词短语表示老师帮助呢
help me with my english maths explain…to me patiently encourage me never to give up praise me when i make progress have a talk with me take me to the hospital when i am ill tell me some good ways to learn……
接表达老师感谢祝福吧
1 i want to say thanksthank you
2 i owe my progresssuccess to your help
3 i owe you a lot for your helpwhat you’ve done for me
4 i’ll never forget your help and i will remember all the happy times we shared together
5 i hope you can be happyhealthy forever
6 i wish you good luckhealth
普通作文
dear miss wang
i’m glad to write to you
you are such a kind and easygoing teacher that we all like you i remember that at first i hated learning new english words very much and i even wanted to give up when you noticed this you had a talk with me you told me some good ways to remember those words and encouraged me never to give up i’ve made great progress in english and now i’m a top student in english
i want to say thanks i will work harder in the future i hope you can be happy and healthy forever
yours
linda
点评:
文信息点齐全层次较清楚语言较通句式定变化作者首先so…that 句式老师善良特点勾勒出接回忆老师初讨厌背单词想放弃学英语时私帮助结尾处老师感谢祝福水渠成感情真挚然
然文章连贯语言优化方面进步改进
满分范文
dear miss wang
i’m glad to write to you at this moment words can no longer express my feelings
how kind and responsible can a teacher be you just gave me the perfect answer i can clearly remember how much i hated learning new english words at first to be honest i really wanted to give up as soon as you noticed this you offered to help me by telling me some shortcuts to learn them you never failed to encourage me even when i made only a little progress little by little my interest in english grew and now i’m a top student in english
i want to say thanks to you i will work harder in the future to live up to your expectations i hope you can be happy and healthy forever
yours
xiaoming
点评:
篇修改作文语言表达文章涵方面相优秀
首先开头at this moment words can no longer express my feelings 短短句话便作者时激动老师感激情表达充分第二段首句设问句how kind and responsible can a teacher be 更精彩描写起初英语单词厌烦时作者how 引导宾语句代原文普通句式
文章渡语恰处 to be honest little by little等均定程度增强文章连贯性外表达法相道出彩 live up to one’s expectations (辜负某期)表示决心整篇文章感情更加饱满真挚留深刻印象
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